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(Contains: sexual themes)

I stand naked in her bathroom doorway. She lies still slumbering in the large bed in the center of the spacious room, right where I left her. It baffles me that she's still there, and still perfect.

Morning light streams through the windows at precisely the angle to accent the supple curves of her sleeping body. Her long, tan legs are tangled in crumpled sheets, her tawny hair strewn in messy tendrils across the pillow.

My groggy mind awakens by increments, the night before coalescing into memories almost as tangible as my growing hard-on. In spite of that, my first coherent thought is how much I want to find my sketchbook and capture the scene.

It’s a compulsion, needing to capture her beauty on paper before it disappears, before I lose this creature that should never have been mine even for a moment. 

I find my sketchbook and move a chair to the foot of the bed, then sit.

My eyes drift over her. Moments of indecision make me pause to wonder whether I should just crawl back into bed with her, to wake her up and relive the night before. But the opportunity to catch her sleeping like this is too good. I’ve had plenty of inconvenient erections. I know I can ignore this one... for now, and for her. She belongs to someone else, and memories can be fleeting, but a drawing is more permanent. My fingers tingle with the urge to capture her on paper, to keep this moment with me so I can revisit it in crisp detail without the muddled filter of a fading memory. 

Suppressing my other urges, I prop my feet on the end of the bed and begin to draw her naked, sleeping figure in the morning light.

For what seems like hours, I sketch.

She changes positions and I flip to the next page, starting anew as the light brightens and the shadows shift.

She rolls onto her back and tosses one arm over her eyes to shade them from the light. Her erect brown nipples cast perfect small shadows onto her beautiful, bare breasts. I bend my head to the page to capture the detail.

When I look up again, she's shifted onto her side. I flip pages and begin sketching again, starting with the plane of the bed, the rumpled sheets, then the quick lines of her legs. As my pencil renders the shapes on the page, one knee bends beneath the sheets causing them to slip down to her thighs. My hand pauses above the page and my eyes drift up those golden thighs and higher. I catch the movement of her hand near her face. Her eyes open and she gives me an amused and sleepy smile.

"Were you drawing me?" she asks, her voice still rough and sexy from sleep.

"The light was right. And you're a great subject… at least when you're sleeping."

"I could still be a good subject," she says seductively.

She kicks the sheets off her feet. One hand slides across her skin, over her breasts and down her stomach, stopping with her fingers just above the floral scrollwork tattoo that graces her bare mons. Her fingertips slip lower in tortuously slow increments.

I'm torn between watching to see how far she'll go and joining her to take care of business myself. I know it's a deliberate ploy at seduction, and it's working. My groin aches, but I refuse to give her the satisfaction of knowing she's gotten to me. I know she’ll accept me when I’m ready. At least I hope she will.

I reposition my sketchbook more strategically to hide my arousal and begin sketching again with abandon, my first strokes rough and quick to catch the basic outlines of her form. After that I attend to details.

The graphite of the pencil drifts smoothly across the surface of the page, the soft curves of her face coming into focus with each stroke. The pencil's tip traces her eyes, low-lidded and seductive, her full lips, parted in invitation. I remember how sweet those lips felt against my own hot skin the night before and quickly quash the memory. I need to focus.

Her cheeks appear flushed so I add quick smudges to the page to represent her apparent arousal.

The pencil traces the delicate line of her neck, down over her shoulders, teasing out the definition of her collarbone and the hollow at the base of her throat. My tongue tingles with the memory of the salty flavor of her in that spot and the flavor of other, less visible places. Saliva irrigates my mouth and I swallow.

My fingertips direct the pencil lower, sketching the weighty curves of her breasts, shading the undersides just so, tweaking the tip in gentle little arcs to define the outlines of her nipples, then shading those with care. The memory of their texture tingles on my tongue. I involuntarily lick my lips and my erection twitches, beckoning me toward the bed, but I still have work to do.

The pencil skims across the undulating landscape of her torso, her narrow waist leading smoothly up the curving slope of her hip and sweeping over and down her thigh. I continue to explore every visible inch of her, seeking out highlights and shadows, shading in the dramatically darker areas attentively, defining each curve and swell with gentle smudges of graphite on the page.

I want to be inside those curves and shadows, to lose myself in them again, and I will... just as soon as I finish capturing her. I need to have this image for a time when we won't be together, which I know is inevitable. She isn't mine, except for in this moment and on this page.

As her toes begin to come into focus I am increasingly aware of her agitation by the shift of her thighs and the twitch of her hips. I trace the pencil back up her lower leg, drawing out the definition of her calf and her knee, then the curve of her inner thigh, remembering the silky smooth skin and the small sigh she made when I caressed her there last night.

She shifts again and lets out an exasperated sound, her position changing before I can go any higher. I pause, lifting my eyes to her face.

"You're right. I'm a terrible subject." Her lips are pressed together in irritation and she drops back onto her pillow in a huff. She turns to stare at me, a look of blatant challenge in her eyes: If I don't take control soon, I may lose the opportunity. Her fingertips slip down again as if to warn me how close I am to missing what may be my last chance to have her.

The pencil hovers over the sketch. I glance at the marks on the page, the perfect rendering of her perfect form. It's enough, I decide, and close the book with the pencil marking the page.

I set the sketchbook on the floor then climb onto the bed and crawl over to her. She turns toward me, slipping her arms around my neck.

"You weren’t even trying," I admonish, pinching her backside playfully. The harsh attention elicits a sharp breath, causing her breasts to graze my arm. She looks into my eyes with a sly smirk and pulls me closer.

"I can't hold still when you're looking at me like that. It feels like your hands are already on me."

I speak in a low murmur as I lay down against her and begin exploring, drawing my palm down over her soft curves. "They were… in a way. If you hold still for a minute I'll show you."

I proceed to demonstrate the process in detail, using my fingertips and the tip of my tongue on her skin rather than pencil on a page. My newest rendering is my masterpiece.

Snippet in the middle of two lovers' budding relationship. He's a young artist. She's a young woman who's probably bad for him. Contains adult themes.

Some of my watchers will recognize this piece.
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Given 2013-06-01
In Drawing Conclusions by *pestomonkey, art meets erotic. ( Suggested by sincebecomeswhy and Featured by neurotype )

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ThePhoenixKing Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2013
Fantastic work!
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OpheliaBell Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2013  Professional Writer
Thanks!
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RioCyan Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You just made drawing every bit as sensual as eating - a glorious, sexy, I've got to read it again, creation. Masterpiece is right!
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OpheliaBell Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Professional Writer
This isn't even the final version. I added about 700 words (naughty ones) to it to meet the publication minimum... hope it gets published!
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TheRedBrickWall Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013
:clap:
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ryanisnasty Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013
Congratulations on the well deserved DD!
I hope you have a fantastic day!
:huggle:
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pearwood Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I like the way it ends, to know that he is not an artistic voyeur, unable to experience the real world except through his drawings. It would have been a terribly sad piece otherwise.

Yet he is an artist first, which she seems to understand and accept. May they find joy along with the passion.
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kiyoshikitty Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
This is beautiful, well-written piece. I find myself in situations similar to this oh so often. (however never in this far of a sexual tone) Women are beautiful creatures with fantastic curves. I may be a straight female, but I have the same feelings for drawing woman's bodies that I do men's faces. Let's just say my guy friends enjoy it thoroughly haha. Regardless, congratulations on this piece, it was wonderful!
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darkapprentise Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
fabulous piece of writing. I love it
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annoyedbysora Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
you're a wonderful writer,
I could picture everything
perfectly.
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Lupitahhhh25 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
:iconpervplz:
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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LizanaBee Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013   Traditional Artist
This is quite lovely. At the beginning, I wasn't sure what I'd gotten myself into by clicking on the link... I wasn't really interested in a detailed erotica, but you kept it at a relatively neutral tone. Clearly aroused, but so passionate about the drawing. I really enjoyed your comparisons to the need to draw and create to the need to relive their previous night. Your allusions to this being a fleeting time leaves me wanting to know more about their story and this young artist whose shoes I can put myself into.

I agree with the comment that you seem to move texturally from the rough paper and sketching to the smoothness of flesh. Wonderful transitions and great balance with being arousing, but not graphic or crass. I also agree with the first comment that the use of the word 'ass' does seem to remove the previous neutrality of the piece... it seems to set the reader up for something a great deal more graphic.
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Bunny--was--here Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
oh wow. Oh wow. Oh wow. This was stunning. This makes me rethink my dating a music major. This is wow. Oh wow. Your words are arousing but not trashy. This is just wow. Thank you.
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neurotype Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Maybe this is informed by growing up drawing, but I think this piece is nicely textural, moving from the roughness of the paper to the smoothness of skin. :)
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MARX77 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013   Photographer
Bravo!
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SimplySilent Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
:heart: Congrats on the DD! :clap:
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LionsQuill Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
Congrats on the DD!!!!!! :w00t: :clap: :squee:
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Destiny3000 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I didn't read a lot of this, but already... its a masterpiece!
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racerman56 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Love the way this is written, very sensual... Congratulations on the DD
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ohsostarryeyed Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013
i solidly understand the narrator here. in whatever art form, sometimes i just feel uncontrollably compelled to capture something in that moment instead of experience it, because there is time for that later, but that moment isn't. i'm having a tough time expressing my thoughts here! haha i think i've written something similar-- yet not nearly as perfectly-- to this before. it's a really great concept, and you executed it astoundingly. congrats!
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GoWeegie Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My reactions to this: " "Were you drawing me?" she asks, her voice still rough and sexy from sleep." --THAT ADJECTIVE. WHY MUST YOU USE THAT ADJECTIVE?!
"I'm torn between watching to see how far she'll go and joining her to take care of business myself. I know it's a deliberate ploy at seduction, and it's working." --NO!! DON'T DO IT, MAN!
"I know she’ll accept me when I’m ready. At least I hope she will." --WHY?! WHY ARE YOU DOING THIS?!
"The memory of their texture tingles on my tongue. I involuntarily lick my lips and my erection twitches, beckoning me toward the bed, but I still have work to do." --DAMN STRAIGHT YOU DO, MAN! DON'T DO ANYTHING YOU'LL REGRET! OKAY, YOU WON'T REGRET IT, BUT DON'T DO IT ANYWAY!
"I want to be inside those curves and shadows, to lose myself in them again, and I will... just as soon as I finish capturing her."-- NO! YOU CAN'T DO THAT, SHE'S NOT MEANT FOR YOU!
"She turns to stare at me, a look of blatant challenge in her eyes: If I don't take control soon, I may lose the opportunity." --LOSE IT, MAN, LOSE THAT OPPORTUNITY! YOU DON'T NEED ALL THAT!
"She turns toward me, slipping her arms around my neck. "You weren’t even trying," I admonish, pinching her backside playfully. The harsh attention elicits a sharp breath, causing her breasts to graze my arm." --WHY?! OH MY GOD, WHY?!
"I speak in a low murmur as I lay down against her and begin exploring, drawing my palm down over her soft curves." --HOLY GOD IN HEAVEN, HOLLOWED BY THY NAME, DON'T DO IT!!! YOU'RE MAKING A MISTAKE!
"I proceed to demonstrate the process in detail, using my fingertips and the tip of my tongue on her skin rather than pencil on a page. My newest rendering is my masterpiece." --:icontableflipplz: WHYYYYYY?!
In conclusion. Yes, I think that this really got me into it. Good job.
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OpheliaBell Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2013  Professional Writer
Glad to see it provoked such a passionate response. I can die happy :)
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catluvr2 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so sweet! Congrats on the DD! :+favlove:
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randomfreakygothgirl Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Professional General Artist
I'm not really one for erotica, but I must say, this was written... perfectly. I love every detail, realistic in the way it's told.
Absolutely wonderful.
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weekendhunters Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh my goodness. This is so well-done, I might just cry.
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Amazing! I love it!:heart:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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Sleyf Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hi!
Congratulations! This piece has been featured in our Weekly Round-up!

Thanks for writing it :D
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OpheliaBell Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Professional Writer
That kicks ass! Thanks :)
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Sleyf Featured By Owner May 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Lol you're welcome!
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cznam Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2013
i love your free mind. You have a true talent to imagine sensual texts. Sometimes, draw, it's keeping a tiny moment of life, before it is forgotten.
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OpheliaBell Featured By Owner May 1, 2013  Professional Writer
You're very right about capturing a moment. Thank you :)
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monstroooo Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderfully sensual piece. I think you do an excellent job of painting the moment; balancing the sketch against a character portrait against a nicely understated eroticism. I liked that it was arousing without being sexy, erotic without being explicit.

That said, I had a few little problems. I started to skim-read in the middle - there's a lot of sketching, undulating and shading going on :plotting: You capture the drawing wonderfully. Technically speaking, I don't think you could have done it much better. But I do think you do it a little too much, and the piece would be stronger if it was either shorter or a little more varied.

I can't help but wonder if this could be a better character portrait. Maybe include more memories of the night before, or tell us a little more about the subject. It's an overwhelmingly physical description - which is entirely suitable to the piece, but I wonder if you could take it a little further than that.

Finally, the use of "ass" in "pinching her ass playfully" really leaped out at me. The language is wonderfully poised for the most part, managing to stay pretty and sexual without going purple. "hard-on" is similar but seems less incongruous. It seems a suitable way for a male narrator to talk about his sexual arousal. But "ass" just feels far too casual, far too cheap. I'm sure there's something better out there :nod:

Otherwise, it's a very engaging, warm piece of work :)
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